1. Posted: March 16, 2016In:

    When a would-be comic peers into a shrink’s patient files to get new comedy material, he gets himself and the shrink he loves into a lot of trouble.

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    Hello, "into a lot of trouble" is too vague in my opinion. A logline is not a teaser, it's a picture of the story - of the plot.

    Hello,
    “into a lot of trouble” is too vague in my opinion. A logline is not a teaser, it’s a picture of the story – of the plot.

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  2. Posted: March 15, 2016In:

    Decide

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    Hello, I think that when you will have changed ?must reveal a painful truth? and "to survive the horrors that threatens their sanity and life" into something clear and understandable, you'll have a viable logline.

    Hello, I think that when you will have changed ?must reveal a painful truth? and “to survive the horrors that threatens their sanity and life” into something clear and understandable, you’ll have a viable logline.

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  3. Posted: March 15, 2016In:

    When a frustrated war correspondent assumes the identity of a dead arms dealer, he must conceal his identity from the rebels or face deadly consequences. The Passenger

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    Hello, I miss a goal for the main character.

    Hello,
    I miss a goal for the main character.

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