1. Posted: October 11, 2015In:

    A corrupt reporter steals a government Hitman’s phone by mistake and now the CIA want him to assassinate their intended target for them or they’ll leak the truth about his own life to the public.

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    Interesting! I would simplify the mechanics, because the CIA can do more that expose him. "When a corrupt reporter answer to a stolen hitman?s phone, he must do the assassionation himself or he'll become the next target".

    Interesting!

    I would simplify the mechanics, because the CIA can do more that expose him.

    “When a corrupt reporter answer to a stolen hitman?s phone, he must do the assassionation himself or he’ll become the next target”.

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  2. Posted: October 11, 2015In:

    When a womanizing porn-star’s penis falls off due to a spell cast on him by his possessive porn-star wife he must undo the spell before the biggest shoot of his career and save his relationship.

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    Hello, I love the idea, I think what should be included in the logline is what he must do to break the spell. In stories?with spells, there are usually 2 structures, -How to?reach the goal even with the spell (Liar liar: he need to win the case?telling only the thruth). In you case, how to shoot a pRead more

    Hello,
    I love the idea, I think what should be included in the logline is what he must do to break the spell.

    In stories?with spells, there are usually 2 structures,
    -How to?reach the goal even with the spell (Liar liar: he need to win the case?telling only the thruth). In you case, how to shoot a porno without an erection.
    -How to break the spell, in this case you should give a lead about what the plan is… what happens in the movie?

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  3. Posted: October 11, 2015In:

    After his father goes to jail a naive television executive deliberately produces the worst possible shows in order to drop the ratings and prevent his father’s network from being taken over, but the shows he produces become a huge success and he is made to continue making them.

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    Hello, Maybe it's not the father in jail who puts the story in motion, but?just the menace of taking over. And who wants to take over the network? Then, I think that you have a clear, ironic, interesting plan?(produce the worst possible show). And you don't need to say "BUT", because in good moviesRead more

    Hello,

    Maybe it’s not the father in jail who puts the story in motion, but?just the menace of taking over. And who wants to take over the network?

    Then, I think that you have a clear, ironic, interesting plan?(produce the worst possible show). And you don’t need to say “BUT”, because in good movies you never have what you’re supposed to get. I think about “Brewster’s Millions” where a man needs to spend a million in a month to have acces to a multi-millions?heritage, obviously it wouldn’t be so?easy. He invests in?the worst possible baseball team… BUT…

    “When?the family’s network risks to be taken?over by a corporation,?a naive television executive must?produce the worst possible show to?drop the ratings, only to find the?audience?is hard to disappoint”.

    But maybe I don’t get your story right. The question is: the plan stay the same (produce the worst possible show, but?the audience like it) or the plan change (he must continue to produce the show but it’s not easy to do it when you’re forced to).

    I would go for a story where the producer try in each episode to do the worst, sure that it would be a disaster, but the plan always fail at the end.

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