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With the family farm in flames, his father murdered, and his mother and sister kidnapped it’s up to young Leif to track them, revenge his father, find his mother and sister and bring them back home, but the Gods have other plans for Leif and his family..
Hello, usually You don't use personal names in the logline (like "Leif"), because names means nothing (unless the character is a famous real person like Mozart). The basic idea is that each elements of a logline must have a meaning for the plot (if the hero is called "Erlend", to keep the name?scandRead more
Hello,
See lessusually You don’t use personal names in the logline (like “Leif”), because names means nothing (unless the character is a famous real person like Mozart). The basic idea is that each elements of a logline must have a meaning for the plot (if the hero is called “Erlend”, to keep the name?scandinavian like Leif, does it make any difference?).
To understand if I would like the movie or not I feel like I need to know what you mean by “god have other plans”: I suggest to add?some details in the logline about this?-?besides you can cut some details from the setting – mother and sister kidnapped for me is enough, I don’t care a lot about the farm in flames in this context, maybe you can sum up better?- the kidnap gives enought motivation to the character. I would spend some words about the opponent too.
In 16th century Japan the African slave of a Jesuit priest rises to become a samurai in the service of its most powerful warlord and faces a corrupt general who plans to topple him.
Hello, The characters and the setting are interesting but it seems to me that you focused too much on this and not enoght on the plot. I suggest to introduce a personal goal for the hero and to introduce a clear inciting event (what puts the story in motion).
Hello,
The characters and the setting are interesting but it seems to me that you focused too much on this and not enoght on the plot.
See lessI suggest to introduce a personal goal for the hero and to introduce a clear inciting event (what puts the story in motion).
When a man born with a fox tail falls in love, he must overcome his insecurities about how he looks, to win his foxy lady.
Hello Try to include a better description of "the man".
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See lessTry to include a better description of “the man”.