1. Posted: September 13, 2012In:

    When a timid janitor's fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate the mythical artifact, uncover its power and save his partner before the devil's army scorches the earth.

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    I like this a lot, dude. I'm just not convinced with the word 'partner' which hints at ''cop'' - but what are the alternatives: lover, girlfriend, sweetheart, loved one... Apart from that I think it rocks!

    I like this a lot, dude. I’m just not convinced with the word ‘partner’ which hints at ”cop” – but what are the alternatives: lover, girlfriend, sweetheart, loved one…

    Apart from that I think it rocks!

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  2. Posted: September 13, 2012In:

    A gangster turned vigilante who's no closer to finding his son's killer after years of searching, gets new information from an unlikely visitor – the son of one of his past victims – but the info comes at a price…

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    sorry...typo. here goes: A self-righteous vigilante, no closer to finding his son?s killer after years of searching, gets new information from an unlikely visitor ? the son of one of his past victims ? but the intel. comes at a price?

    sorry…typo. here goes:

    A self-righteous vigilante, no closer to finding his son?s killer after years of searching, gets new information from an unlikely visitor ? the son of one of his past victims ? but the intel. comes at a price?

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  3. Posted: September 13, 2012In:

    A gangster turned vigilante who's no closer to finding his son's killer after years of searching, gets new information from an unlikely visitor – the son of one of his past victims – but the info comes at a price…

    Filmstar Penpusher

    refined: A self-righteous vigilante, no closer to finding his son's killer after years of searching, gets new information from an unlikely visitor ? the son of one of his past victims ? but the intel. comes at the a price? (do I need to say the price, or can I leave some mystery?)

    refined:

    A self-righteous vigilante, no closer to finding his son’s killer after years of searching, gets new information from an unlikely visitor ? the son of one of his past victims ? but the intel. comes at the a price?

    (do I need to say the price, or can I leave some mystery?)

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