1. Posted: September 11, 2012In:

    A grieving, self-righteous Vigilante must confront a fatal error before burying his hatchet in the killer of his son…

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    Or: "A revenge-obsessed Vigilante must accept a tragic error if he's to bury his hatchet ?in the evil child-killer who tortured and murdered his young son.

    Or: “A revenge-obsessed Vigilante must accept a tragic error if he’s to bury his hatchet ?in the evil child-killer who tortured and murdered his young son.

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  2. Posted: September 11, 2012In:

    A grieving, self-righteous Vigilante must confront a fatal error before burying his hatchet in the killer of his son…

    Filmstar Penpusher

    or: A grieving, self-righteous Vigilante must confront a fatal error if he's to bury his hatchet in the killer of his son?

    or:

    A grieving, self-righteous Vigilante must confront a fatal error if he’s to bury his hatchet in the killer of his son?

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  3. Posted: September 10, 2012In:

    On a dare a naive orphan tries to get aboard a legendary space ship, and back to the orphanage before dinner with a "souvenir" from the ship or the two bullies who made the dare will smash his model space ship.

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    I would decide on an ending first - because you'll want to foreshadow or set - up the ending with dialogue or visuals which can be paid off later in ACT 3

    I would decide on an ending first – because you’ll want to foreshadow or set – up the ending with dialogue or visuals which can be paid off later in ACT 3

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