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When images of a past that is not his own almost get a CIA Agent killed on assignment, he disobeys orders to search for the mysterious woman from his vision, but must evade his own agency who’ve made him a target to keep them from meeting.
Both really helpful comments I appreciate the help
Both really helpful comments I appreciate the help
See lessA perfectionist middle-aged business consultant gets in contact with his childhood sweetheart by an older letter which reminds him of their promise to marry with 35 years, but his flare up feelings are against his lonely structured lifestyle and she is already engaged and will marry soon.
I like where this is going, but like the above has mentioned needs some tidying up. Not sure if want a romcom from this, but that is kinda the impression I got, so another way of writing could be along the lines of: On the eve of her wedding, a bride-zilla is shocked when her childhood sweetheart arRead more
I like where this is going, but like the above has mentioned needs some tidying up. Not sure if want a romcom from this, but that is kinda the impression I got, so another way of writing could be along the lines of: On the eve of her wedding, a bride-zilla is shocked when her childhood sweetheart arrives with a contract they signed 20 years ago saying they were to be married and can only be void if she can find him someone to marry before her own wedding.
Not perfect, but that is just the vibe I got from the original log line.
See lessAfter an unsuccessful journalist from Greece, who lives at subsistence level, and his childhood sweetheart from Germany meet again, he wants to prove to her that their relationship can work, and that he can bring structure in his chaotic life before she carries back to her job as a flight attendant.
There is a lot going here, and seems the female becoming a flight attendant is to add a timer or ticking clock to the log line, which isn't a bad idea, but I think it confuses what the main conflict is in the story. Personally, I would add an element of Irony to the logline by perhaps suggesting heRead more
There is a lot going here, and seems the female becoming a flight attendant is to add a timer or ticking clock to the log line, which isn’t a bad idea, but I think it confuses what the main conflict is in the story.
Personally, I would add an element of Irony to the logline by perhaps suggesting he is unsuccessful as a journalist, but when he meets her he discovers she is sitting on top of the biggest story of the year and plans to lead her on to get to the heart of the story, but perhaps when he hands the story into the publisher, he discovers he has 24 hours to stop the story being printed when he comes to realise he has fallen in love with her and his really happiness would not come from his successful career, but from sharing his life with someone.
That is just my thoughts, I think you have a potential story here there are several approaches you could take. Maybe the guy is an old fashioned type and thinks it should the man’s career that takes priority despite the fact she has a great promotion lined up and he’ll have to give up his job to move for her.
Anyways keep plugging away, trust me I have written a few of these myself and still not getting the right even when I think I have.
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