1. Posted: November 25, 2012In:

    When the comet that was supposed to destroy the earth doesn't, a group of people must come to terms with the things they did when they thought the world was going to end.

    Kriss Tolliday

    I can see what you are trying to do with it and is a very interesting take on an overdone end of world epic. one that is very good and quite grounded is 'Seeking A Friend For The End Of The World' which is a really good film. I think with the log line you should look at the central heart of the filmRead more

    I can see what you are trying to do with it and is a very interesting take on an overdone end of world epic. one that is very good and quite grounded is ‘Seeking A Friend For The End Of The World’ which is a really good film. I think with the log line you should look at the central heart of the film and use that mainly with the end of the world being the backdrop. Really it sounds like a story about the priest and others’ regrets. In the log line I would maybe put the comet at the end so people don’t think it is just another end of world movie. I think Lucius has raised some really good points.

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  2. Posted: November 23, 2012In:

    Idea for a six part comedy series: The worst Monday in a construction site's two week history is retold from six different perspectives to discover which one killed their foreman.

    Kriss Tolliday

    Thanks Lucius. I'm still plotting the episodes now so will post a log line for an episode once I am happy with the story line. This I suppose would be the log line for the entire series. I'll get to work on threading my story and produce some log lines for each episode.

    Thanks Lucius. I’m still plotting the episodes now so will post a log line for an episode once I am happy with the story line. This I suppose would be the log line for the entire series. I’ll get to work on threading my story and produce some log lines for each episode.

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  3. Posted: November 22, 2012In:

    A student fed up with life uses his student loans to go on a cross-country trip to a video game tournament, meeting his teammates along the way.

    Kriss Tolliday

    There doesn't give us much here regarding stakes and reasons. Has he got to enter the tournament to win as he has spent all his loan? Could his friends be pivotal for his gaming style and has to pick them up, only they live on opposite sides of the country? So far the line tells us the a student isRead more

    There doesn’t give us much here regarding stakes and reasons. Has he got to enter the tournament to win as he has spent all his loan? Could his friends be pivotal for his gaming style and has to pick them up, only they live on opposite sides of the country? So far the line tells us the a student is driving to a tournament and will meet people as he goes, we need to know more really.

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