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A meek sociologist researching on rape victims falls for one of his interviewees, only to find himself targeted by her assailant and the police.
I want to know why the sociologist is targeted. I think that is something that should be in here. Is it because he has become involved with the subject or is there a much bigger conspiracy taking place?
I want to know why the sociologist is targeted. I think that is something that should be in here. Is it because he has become involved with the subject or is there a much bigger conspiracy taking place?
See lessA disconnected young Indigenous Australian and his family are taken by aliens, forcing him to believe in higher powers.
The one below is better as tells us more. This one doesn't give us an entire story or a journey. There isn't much there to pull out a full film. If they are taken by aliens surely they want to get home so that should be what is in the logline so people know the film will be about them trying to getRead more
The one below is better as tells us more. This one doesn’t give us an entire story or a journey. There isn’t much there to pull out a full film. If they are taken by aliens surely they want to get home so that should be what is in the logline so people know the film will be about them trying to get home. ‘believing in higher powers’ isn’t enough to sustain an audience for an entire film as doesn’t feel like it is anything. Need to mention a goal in the log line. The one below is better and people have given you some great comments on that in which direction to take it.
Hope this helps
See lessRevision: An unhappy couple enters the Wife Carrying Contest, per the request of a young rookie psychologist, in hopes that it will revitalize their marriage.
I think Lucius' line sums the story up quickly and without having too much going on. People won't know what a wife carrying contest is (despite it being obvious) so you need to get across what it means without eating up your word count. It will be a tough one to get right as you have something unusuRead more
I think Lucius’ line sums the story up quickly and without having too much going on. People won’t know what a wife carrying contest is (despite it being obvious) so you need to get across what it means without eating up your word count. It will be a tough one to get right as you have something unusual but as long as you make it intriguing you should be ok. Also if it is a comedy try and make that obvious in the log line as now it doesn’t seem as comedic as before. The title also needs looking at as it isn’t really that intriguing. ‘Carrying the load’ or ‘The Wife Carrying Contest’ would be better.
Hope this helps
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