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When a ruthless bank robber finds a gate to a parallel universe, any crime seems possible to escape, until the other self gets to take the blame.
This is a very unique idea, sounds really interesting but still think more needs to be added like will they have to get back into the former world to save himself? Will he rob a major mob boss in the parallel universe which means he is hunted in the other one? Obviously he is taking the blame for itRead more
This is a very unique idea, sounds really interesting but still think more needs to be added like will they have to get back into the former world to save himself? Will he rob a major mob boss in the parallel universe which means he is hunted in the other one? Obviously he is taking the blame for it all but just taking the blame isn’t enough there needs to be a death threat or family threat or something that he desperately must learn a lesson, change his ways, and get back in order to save himself.
The idea is very interesting but think you can make it even more interesting in the log line, for starters think of a main antagonist and if you have one add them in. Raise the stakes for you protagonist so that he must change in order to survive.
Hope this helps
See lessWhen a policeman\'s family is kidnapped by a sadistic crime lord he must kill the chief of police, his father in law, to save them.
I would agree with the above comments. It tells us exactly what we need to know in a short sentence, and gives us stakes, drama, a hook, and clear goodies and baddies (excuse the terms). I can see where the others are coming from in terms of ending on a stronger word plus perhaps adding in another tRead more
I would agree with the above comments. It tells us exactly what we need to know in a short sentence, and gives us stakes, drama, a hook, and clear goodies and baddies (excuse the terms). I can see where the others are coming from in terms of ending on a stronger word plus perhaps adding in another twist so it doesn’t sound like your normal cop vs crime lord movie.
The log line works just think it needs a little spicing up.
See lessAfter his brother kills a crooked cop in self-defence, an idealistic detective fights for their survival against the entire force, led by his old commanding officer.
This tells us so much more plus gives us a hook, stakes, and an internal fight for the main character. Having to choose between family and the job to which he loves will cause him to really struggle with his inner voice telling him what to do. Plus if he was good friends with his commanding officerRead more
This tells us so much more plus gives us a hook, stakes, and an internal fight for the main character. Having to choose between family and the job to which he loves will cause him to really struggle with his inner voice telling him what to do. Plus if he was good friends with his commanding officer it raises even more stakes and even more struggles. It does feel like a different movie now and takes away the ’16 Blocks’ image.
This has got me intrigued into the film now as want to know how much depth it will go into. Not that you need to put all that in a log line but it has got me wanting to know. Is the brother known to the police? Why was he attacked by the cop? Does the detective have a better relationship with his commanding officer than his brother? These are questions I want answers to and the log line has me asking them. If there is a way of hinting at some of them in there get them in but at the end of the day if the log line doesn’t ask questions it isn’t doing its job.
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