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Struggling to rise up after a traumatic injury, a man becomes a firefighter. Hindered by extreme medical issues from the incident, he fights for both his job and a woman across the country.
Hi Jay A logline's ideal word count?is between 25 and?30 words, best that you re draft this with the aim to reduce the length. In addition please read the training tab on the top bar for further advise on logline conventions and best practice.
Hi Jay
A logline’s ideal word count?is between 25 and?30 words, best that you re draft this with the aim to reduce the length. In addition please read the training tab on the top bar for further advise on logline conventions and best practice.
See lessA cheap con-artist attempts to outrun and outmuscle a Mexican cartel?s butcher by hiring an aspiring-but-clueless circus strongman for protection when he swindles them out of 50 million dollars.
Easy cowboy...There are far too many details, in the wrong order, here to make out a clear plot.After he swindles them out of 50m the cartel chase him right? How is this out of the ordinary? It is expected that if some one were to swindle a Mexican cartel out of even 5 cents, they would be hung fromRead more
Easy cowboy…
There are far too many details, in the wrong order, here to make out a clear plot.
After he swindles them out of 50m the cartel chase him right? How is this out of the ordinary? It is expected that if some one were to swindle a Mexican cartel out of even 5 cents, they would be hung from the highest tree – if they’re lucky that is.
Point is the MC set in motion a sequence of events he knew were going to happen, if he isn’t prepared for it then he is a fool and the audience will likely find it hard to empathise with him. If he is prepared for it, then it’s not much of an obstacle for him to over come. All he has to do is follow the plan and keep running, and to that matter, when does he stop? How does he know the cartel will no longer send people after him? Or in other words, what is his goal? Sure he’ll out run or kill the current “butcher” but surly any Mexican cartel worth their weight would send another and another until they get what they want.
I think best to devise a different inciting incident, one that is an event out of the ordinary which dramatically impacts?the MC and forces him to take action. Also best to give a better?goal?for the MC one past which the reader knows, beyond a doubt, that the story ends.
See lessWhen two robbers conspire to rob from their rich friend’s arts gallery shop, stealing and selling an ancient sculpture to a ghost arts collector. Their success only attracts an endless torment that taunts them and their families until they retrieve and return their friend’s mysterious artifact.
Agreed with the above comments, perhaps if they were to need the money in order to save some one else, while a crime it's a crime for a good reason. This way you could give their modus operandi a Robin Hoodesk characteristic, and give them some for of redeeming quality.
Agreed with the above comments, perhaps if they were to need the money in order to save some one else, while a crime it’s a crime for a good reason. This way you could give their modus operandi a Robin Hoodesk characteristic, and give them some for of redeeming quality.
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