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After the mysterious arrival of a stolen diamond and her missing brother's diary, an art forgery expert discovers that her long lost family was involved in an unsolved international crime, and is forced on a quest through the dark catacombs of Siberia to discover the truth
In case it hasn't been made clear... Specific details. High stakes. Clear cause and effect relationship. One compelling goal.
In case it hasn’t been made clear…
Specific details.
High stakes.
Clear cause and effect relationship.
One compelling goal.
See lessAfter the mysterious arrival of a stolen diamond and her missing brother's diary, an art forgery expert discovers that her long lost family was involved in an unsolved international crime, and is forced on a quest through the dark catacombs of Siberia to discover the truth
Corridorone. It is obvious from your multiple attempts that you are passionate about this concept. We are here to help each other and therefore my reply to this thread. I think there may be a fundamental miss understanding with regards to the function of a logline and its components. A logline is aRead more
Corridorone.
It is obvious from your multiple attempts that you are passionate about this concept. We are here to help each other and therefore my reply to this thread.
I think there may be a fundamental miss understanding with regards to the function of a logline and its components.
A logline is a tool used to describe a plot. A plot is a combination of causally connected events and specific actions taken by a clearly motivated character.
Since this is not the case with all the drafts of this concept’s logline to-date perhaps an example will help.
A logline for a film:
After a cynical cop’s wife is taken hostage by a group of terrorists he must fight them to save her life and the other hostages by preventing the assailants from carrying out their plan.
Because of one thing that happens out of the ordinary the Main Character is clearly motivated to take a course of action to achieve a specific goal.
I will try to do the same with your concept, since the SPECIFICS are missing I will make them up to illustrate what I mean:
After a timid art expert’s brother, an archaeologist, is kidnapped in Siberia his diary shows up on her door step she must track him down to save his life.
The diamond, treasure, crime from the past and family secrets are all colorful additions to this main plot and should be reserved for the synopsis.
Hope this helps.
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The latest draft of the logline lacks specificity as it uses vague descriptions similar to the original post. What does "...uncovers its dark past..." mean? What will it look like? What does "...power to shape its future..." mean? What will this look like? The answers to these questions need to be cRead more
The latest draft of the logline lacks specificity as it uses vague descriptions similar to the original post.
What does “…uncovers its dark past…” mean? What will it look like?
What does “…power to shape its future…” mean? What will this look like?
The answers to these questions need to be clear in the logline because they will describe what the main action will be the characters take in the film.
Lastly, there are two separate characters with two separate vague goals.
See lessWho is the main character? Who is the main dramatic point of view character?