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In an apocalyptic winter filled with zombies, Juliet is on a rampage to kill Romeo at all costs.
The last draft of the logline reads better and adds clarity over the original one. Most loglines don't include character names so don't feel bad about omitting them. The only reason to include a character name is if the name informs nature of the character in a story critical way such as Jesus or GaRead more
The last draft of the logline reads better and adds clarity over the original one. Most loglines don’t include character names so don’t feel bad about omitting them. The only reason to include a character name is if the name informs nature of the character in a story critical way such as Jesus or Gandhi?
In this instance as previously mentioned the names are not fulfilling that role.
I would drop the left for dead betrayed by her true love is enough for an inciting incident. I would also change the character description to reflect more about the Mc nature and flaw than “…one woman?”.
After she is betrayed by her true love during a zombie apocalypse a shy librarian must take up arms to exact revenge against her fianc?.
I would add perhaps that she must lead a group of patrons to freedom in to the mix or other wise give her an additional hurdle to over come.
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Greed with Richiev the inciting incident is missing. Other wise this sets up a potentially interesting scifi story.
Greed with Richiev the inciting incident is missing.
Other wise this sets up a potentially interesting scifi story.
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However most of what I wrote in the first comment still applies.
However most of what I wrote in the first comment still applies.
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