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A religious man with a serial-killer split personality struggles to suppress his sinister side while evading the detective who apprehended him in the first place.
Understood to clarify; Evading the detective is every crime story ever told. What does he want specifically? Get to Alaska and live free? Cross the border to Mexico? etc? Aslo How is he specifically going to achieve it? Dress like a rabbi to through the cops off? Dress like a woman? Travel at night?Read more
Understood to clarify;
Evading the detective is every crime story ever told. What does he want specifically? Get to Alaska and live free? Cross the border to Mexico? etc?
Aslo How is he specifically going to achieve it? Dress like a rabbi to through the cops off? Dress like a woman? Travel at night? etc?
With no inciting incident, no specific action and with no specific goal described the plot is unclear.
See lessA microbiologist and his son discover a new strain of mind controlling fungus in the deepest mine on earth, now they must stop it from getting to the surface and infecting the world above.
This has good potential man V nature with a hint of scifi. A disaster movie set under ground with huge stakes humanity is at stake and a clear goal stop the fungus. Secondly this could be a relatively cheap production with a handful of sets and a handful of characters. I would structure the loglineRead more
This has good potential man V nature with a hint of scifi. A disaster movie set under ground with huge stakes humanity is at stake and a clear goal stop the fungus.
Secondly this could be a relatively cheap production with a handful of sets and a handful of characters.
I would structure the logline differently though. Make the inciting incident more significant of an event that explains the risks at hand perhaps they had a few other members in their expedition and one got killed by the fungus.
E.g:
After a fungus infects one of their team members a microbiologist and his son must lead their under ground expedition up from the deepest mine on earth to stop the fungus from reaching the surface and infect the world.
Hope this helps.
See lessA religious man with a serial-killer split personality struggles to suppress his sinister side while evading the detective who apprehended him in the first place.
This sounds interesting almost like a film about a devout Dexter. His religious beliefs and his killing urges could give him a lot of inner conflict. Why not describe him as a priest of a large community this way his outer shell will contradict his inner demons and give you a lot to play with in forRead more
This sounds interesting almost like a film about a devout Dexter. His religious beliefs and his killing urges could give him a lot of inner conflict.
Why not describe him as a priest of a large community this way his outer shell will contradict his inner demons and give you a lot to play with in form of metaphors.
Currently however the logline doesn’t describe a plot, what is the MC goal and what is the inciting incident?
Hope this helps.
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