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When education is privatised, a resolute teacher must delve into a world of shady dealings between the government and a pharmaceuticals company to prevent a world takeover.
Privatizing education is confusing as an inciting incident because I don't strait away understand its implications on teachers. More so what is the connection between this event and a government's effort to take over the world with a pharmaceutical company? Lastly what does taking over the world meaRead more
Privatizing education is confusing as an inciting incident because I don’t strait away understand its implications on teachers.
More so what is the connection between this event and a government’s effort to take over the world with a pharmaceutical company?
Lastly what does taking over the world mean? What will it look like? What does shady dealings mean? What dealings exactly?
These are too vague as descriptions for a logline and as a result the reader is left wondering what the stakes are exactly.
Hope this helps.
See lessthe seven deadly sins come to earth in human form. Than decide to compete for the soul of a novice priest with his destruction being the ultimate prize.
This really is a modern day version of the story of Job as DPG pointed out can't say it sounds original in any way as its been done many a times. Lee Brooks raises an interesting alternative the story of Job told from the point of view of the devil. What if indeed the stakes are so high for the DeviRead more
This really is a modern day version of the story of Job as DPG pointed out can’t say it sounds original in any way as its been done many a times.
Lee Brooks raises an interesting alternative the story of Job told from the point of view of the devil. What if indeed the stakes are so high for the Devil and you some how (like in Little Nicky) make the devil an empathetic character?
This would be more original than the strait forward take on the same story.
Hope this helps.
See lessWhen a Chicago shootout is witnessed by two wily male musicians they must travel by train disguised as show girls to evade capture.
Great read by the way I have a copy of the original production script at home and have read it many times. About the logline best to make you characters more active by stating that they witnessed as apposed to witnessed by. After two musicians witness a mob massacre they disguise themselves as womenRead more
Great read by the way I have a copy of the original production script at home and have read it many times.
About the logline best to make you characters more active by stating that they witnessed as apposed to witnessed by.
After two musicians witness a mob massacre they disguise themselves as women and flee to Florida as part of an all woman band to stay alive.
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