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When a robotics genius goes missing, a jaded, debt-ridden PI who hates androids and whose eye implants are switched off must reanimate his hated android and work together to find the missing man who holds the key to his eyesight being restored and debts wiped.
What is the MC's primary goal? Is it getting his eyesight back or is it getting rid of his debt? You seam to have the A pot and the B plot mixed into the one logline best to use the logline to describe only the A plot. Otherwise the logline is too long and the inciting incident doesn't seam like a gRead more
What is the MC’s primary goal?
Is it getting his eyesight back or is it getting rid of his debt?
You seam to have the A pot and the B plot mixed into the one logline best to use the logline to describe only the A plot.
Otherwise the logline is too long and the inciting incident doesn’t seam like a good motivator for the MC as presumably finding missing people is a normal part of hi job.
What happens in this instance that is out of the ordinary that the MC needs to fix?
Hope this helps.
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Remove them if they are not part of the main plot. Inciting incident happens to the flawed MC making her must achieve a clear goal. see my example above.
Remove them if they are not part of the main plot.
Inciting incident happens to the flawed MC making her must achieve a clear goal. see my example above.
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This concept keeps attracting the same feedback as each iteration of the logline does not add the crucial missing elements a logline needs. MC - DA Flaw - ? Inciting incident - ? Obstacle - ? Goal - ? Even though this is a logline for a series it should still describe the goal and obstacle of the piRead more
This concept keeps attracting the same feedback as each iteration of the logline does not add the crucial missing elements a logline needs.
MC – DA
Flaw – ?
Inciting incident – ?
Obstacle – ?
Goal – ?
Even though this is a logline for a series it should still describe the goal and obstacle of the pilot episode.
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