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After a big CEO threatens to convert their inherited community TV station into a home shopping channel. Two brothers must find the worst talent to produce the worst shows in order to make the CEO lose interest and give them back their station to uphold their dying father's wish.
Good thinking with the introduction of a family feud however I don't think the order of events in the story has been made clear ( a point on its own by the way ). The CEO had already purchased the majority of shares in the station before the story starts. Therefore it is in his best interest to retaRead more
Good thinking with the introduction of a family feud however I don’t think the order of events in the story has been made clear ( a point on its own by the way ).
The CEO had already purchased the majority of shares in the station before the story starts. Therefore it is in his best interest to retain the value of the company and its current viewing audience. So if the brothers want to get the company back to uphold their dying fathers wish they have to make the CEO lose his interest. Not the other way around.
Considering this are there any suggestions as to how best to re draft the logline?
Thanks for your help.
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The MC's name shouldn't be in the logline unless critical to the plot best to describe his character and flaw then goal and obstacle. The logline describes a situation not a plot as we don't know what the MC wants to achieve and how he will do so. Also how are these murders connected to the MC? In wRead more
The MC’s name shouldn’t be in the logline unless critical to the plot best to describe his character and flaw then goal and obstacle.
The logline describes a situation not a plot as we don’t know what the MC wants to achieve and how he will do so.
Also how are these murders connected to the MC? In what way is this personal for him? Or is this a strait up ‘who done it’?
Regardless it would be good to provide personal stakes for the MC as this is not an Agatha Cristie story with a pre established episodic formula. Charming and interesting in their own right a new franchise of a Poirot esk type would likely be very hard to finance this day and age without the built in fan based audience.
Hope this helps.
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Interesting re draft Rutger thanks.
Interesting re draft Rutger thanks.
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