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REVISED VERSION: While investigating a mysterious murder, a hard-boiled investigative journalist risks his life to stop a corrupt government launching a genetically engineered weapon against an unsuspecting population.
Hey Ash, Next time, please just post any revisions in the thread for the original logline. That way, everyone can see how the logline develops. Thank you! Cheers, Karel Chief Logliner
Hey Ash,
Next time, please just post any revisions in the thread for the original logline. That way, everyone can see how the logline develops.
Thank you!
Cheers,
Karel
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In Sydney, 1959, a Labour politician uncovers a corrupt scheme to terminate the city?s trams. Will he defy his Party or lose the respect of everyone he values, himself included?
All the elements are there, and as a marketing logline I think it works fine. To diagnose it, sometimes it's easier to apply our formula: Sydney 1959. When a Labour politician uncovers a corrupt scheme to terminate the trams,?he must?defy his Party or lose the respect of everyone he values, himselfRead more
All the elements are there, and as a marketing logline I think it works fine.
To diagnose it, sometimes it’s easier to apply our formula:
Sydney 1959. When a Labour politician uncovers a corrupt scheme to terminate the trams,?he must?defy his Party or lose the respect of everyone he values, himself included.
The only caveat I have is that ‘defy his Party’ doesn’t sound particularly cinematic.?What specifically will the politician need to DO in the 2nd act? Perhaps the logline would be stronger if you include the antagonist, so it becomes clearly a personal conflict.
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"if the script for the Big L had been written by an outsider with no credentials, no representation, no track record, would it have gotten a reading no matter how well-crafted the logline?"Good question, DPG. One we can?ask about pretty much every Coen Brothers movie...All their movies are exceptionRead more
“if the script for the Big L had been written by an outsider with no credentials, no representation, no track record, would it have gotten a reading no matter how well-crafted the logline?”
Good question, DPG. One we can?ask about pretty much every Coen Brothers movie…
All their movies are exceptionally well executed, though.
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