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Unforgiven meets House of 1,000 Corpses.
Hey Shawn - Well done for posting your second logline! Now it is time to review at least four loglines by other writers on this site! The only condition of use of this website is to return the favour of reviewing loglines. About your own contribution of today:?Check out our section about how to writRead more
Hey Shawn – Well done for posting your second logline! Now it is time to review at least four loglines by other writers on this site! The only condition of use of this website is to return the favour of reviewing loglines.
About your own contribution of today:?Check out our section about how to write loglines. This is not a logline; it is not even a tag line.
In industry terms, we call it ‘comps’, or comparables.
A logline tells us what the key elements of the story are.
Once you have more details about the story idea, please post them below as a comment in this thread. That will help future visitors.
Happy loglining!
Cheers,
Karel
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Even if the story is not 100 logical, the logline needs to seem reasonable. This one feels a little bizarre, and there's nothing/nobody really for us to care for. As Mike said, there is no obstacle in the first place. Also please note that no screenwriting documents (logline, synopsis, treatment) alRead more
Even if the story is not 100 logical, the logline needs to seem reasonable. This one feels a little bizarre, and there’s nothing/nobody really for us to care for. As Mike said, there is no obstacle in the first place.
Also please note that no screenwriting documents (logline, synopsis, treatment) allow for verbs in the past tense. This is a pretty big no-no.
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In the hands of the right writer/director, this could be an interesting picture, but the logline doesn't sell it. Multi-protagonist is hard to pull off as it is, so I'm afraid SIX undefined characters is a little much. Also, why two cities? And what does 'before it is too late' mean? My first adviceRead more
In the hands of the right writer/director, this could be an interesting picture, but the logline doesn’t sell it. Multi-protagonist is hard to pull off as it is, so I’m afraid SIX undefined characters is a little much. Also, why two cities? And what does ‘before it is too late’ mean?
My first advice would be to focus on ONE character in the logline, so you can give us detail and depth.
(I have taken the liberty to fix the punctuation.)
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