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When a controversial podcast host believes an invasion is coming on Halloween, his friends bring him to a party to get his mind off of the ridiculous theories; but when one of the host’s friends reads a spell from an ancient book that unleashes several deities, the host and his friends must survive the night to break the spell.
I like it! "When ... believes": I'd like to know specifically what makes him believe this. Who is the messenger? Is there a messenger? As I'm a sucker for a good Inciting Incident/Call To Adventure, I want to see that moment on the screen - and I want it to be powerful. "Believe" isn't strong enoughRead more
I like it!
“When … believes”: I’d like to know specifically what makes him believe this. Who is the messenger? Is there a messenger? As I’m a sucker for a good Inciting Incident/Call To Adventure, I want to see that moment on the screen – and I want it to be powerful. “Believe” isn’t strong enough as an Event.
I am assuming that the host is the Hero. Other than being ‘controversial’, I’d like to know if he has a weakness/flaw that he needs to overcome, or that turns out to be a strength. Is he superstitious?
Finally – ‘spell’ stories are hard to tell/sell because the audience cannot reasonably foresee how the spell can be lifted. Often the spell is lifted when the main character changes their behaviour for the better, has learned something etc. In horror this may be slightly different, as the spell/antagonist often lives on beyond the movie…
All that said, I think it’s a fun setup with a plot promise we can easily visualise.
I hope this helps.
BTW – Welcome to Logline It, and thank you for posting & reviewing! 🙂
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All good points. I am totally with you that here on Logline It, we should aim to write loglines as if the movie had not been made yet, i. e. we need to convince the reader 1) that there is a story and 2) that we understand how to develop this story structurally. I somewhat agree on the cultural anglRead more
All good points.
I am totally with you that here on Logline It, we should aim to write loglines as if the movie had not been made yet, i. e. we need to convince the reader 1) that there is a story and 2) that we understand how to develop this story structurally.
I somewhat agree on the cultural angle, although the core drama would have worked in any culture IMO.
The way the love story is incorporated is clumsy, I know. But I think that will always be difficult if we want to stay under 50 words…
As to the fabula/sujet (“syuzhet”??? 😉 ) that would be determined on a case-by-case basis. Sujet takes my preference, but it’s not always possible to do this coherently.
Thanks for you notes. Gold, as always!
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It?s a clever structure, and this is often hard to convey in a logline. But ? and you saw this coming ? I would have made the suspicion of cheating the Inciting Incident. Or isn?t it? ?When an uneducated man is suspected of cheating when he?s about to win?Who Wants To Be. A Millionaire, he must builRead more
It?s a clever structure, and this is often hard to convey in a logline.
But ? and you saw this coming ? I would have made the suspicion of cheating the Inciting Incident. Or isn?t it?
?When an uneducated man is suspected of cheating when he?s about to win?Who Wants To Be. A Millionaire, he must build the case of how he knows the answers, and win the freedom of the woman he loves.?
What do you think?
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