1. Posted: February 4, 2020In:

    A reclusive, homesick fugitive is told that his son has gone missing. When he also discovers that his vengeful ex-partner in crime has tracked him down, he must come out of hiding in order to protect his true identity and save his son.

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    "When his vengeful ex-partner kidnaps his son, a fugitive from the mob must come out of hiding in order to rescue his child."

    “When his vengeful ex-partner kidnaps his son, a fugitive from the mob must come out of hiding in order to rescue his child.”

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  2. Posted: January 31, 2020In:

    After rescuing a baby found outside of her family’s cabin,? an apathetic teen must shelter him from the approaching blizzard and fend off relentless attacks from his monstrous, “Parent,” until the storm passes.

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    I think all the elements are there, as for me personally, and in the case of this logline, I assume the things I don't know nor understand, (Like the monstrous parent) will be fully explained in the actual script.So if you make any changes, make sure they are more like tweaks than a major overhaul.

    I think all the elements are there, as for me personally, and in the case of this logline, I assume the things I don’t know nor understand, (Like the monstrous parent) will be fully explained in the actual script.

    So if you make any changes, make sure they are more like tweaks than a major overhaul.

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  3. Posted: January 26, 2020In:

    When an avid lens collector takes a photo with a mysterious camera, he is captured in a murder he can only hope to escape.

    Richiev Singularity

    The logline is a little hard to read, so a little clarity might help"When the photo he took with a mysterious new camera shows himself committing murder, an avid lens collector..." (Must discover the origins of the camera if he is to avoid his murderous fate)The part in parenthesis is just guessworkRead more

    The logline is a little hard to read, so a little clarity might help

    “When the photo he took with a mysterious new camera shows himself committing murder, an avid lens collector…” (Must discover the origins of the camera if he is to avoid his murderous fate)

    The part in parenthesis is just guesswork.

    You have a lead character: Avid lens collector (original)

    You have the inciting incident: A picture of a murder (I think you are saying, a picture of the lead committing a murder, but not sure)

    Goal: I am not sure from reading your logline what the lead characters’ tangible goal is, that’s why I added the part in parenthesis.

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