1. Posted: September 13, 2017In:

    A relief party of argonauts is assembled to reestablish correspondence with a gold claim in the mountains of California where a terrible beast sentinels a vast fortune.

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    What is a relief party of Argonauts? How do you sentinel a vast fortune? What connects this story to the audience? What is the hook?

    What is a relief party of Argonauts?

    How do you sentinel a vast fortune?

    What connects this story to the audience? What is the hook?

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  2. Posted: September 4, 2017In:

    A disillusioned crusader returns home to find wife in danger of losing her soul.

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    What does, "...in danger of losing her soul," mean?Has she become a back slider? Is some evil being after her? is she listening to Pat Boone records instead of Aretha Franklin?Here would be an example of a logline with specifics: Yours would be different of course. ----- "When he comes home do discoRead more

    What does, “…in danger of losing her soul,” mean?

    Has she become a back slider?
    Is some evil being after her?
    is she listening to Pat Boone records instead of Aretha Franklin?

    Here would be an example of a logline with specifics: Yours would be different of course.
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    “When he comes home do discover his wife has made a deal with the devil for his safe return, a disillusioned crusader must win three combat challenges against Satan’s?champions to win back her soul”

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  3. Posted: August 23, 2017In:

    When an eccentric family moves into a defunct church building, the enigmatic grandfather starts to preach on Sundays, inspiring but stirring up trouble with the locals.

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    Since the grandfather is the only character mentioned I am going to assume he is the lead... If that is the case one important element which is missing is the leads goal. What does your lead want? Adding that element to the logline will improve it greatly (If the Grandfather is not the lead characteRead more

    Since the grandfather is the only character mentioned I am going to assume he is the lead… If that is the case one important element which is missing is the leads goal.

    What does your lead want?
    Adding that element to the logline will improve it greatly

    (If the Grandfather is not the lead character, you should just do another logline from the perspective of whoever is the lead)

    Good luck

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