1. Posted: January 22, 2014In:

    After an explosion, a marine wakes up in a place with other people from different times, his mission is to lead the group to recover artifacts spread in different times in history and avoid an alien invasion in the future.

    Richiev Singularity

    To avoid an invasion in the future, a marine is tasked by a mysterious entity to recover hidden alien artifacts spread through the past.? Hope that helps, good luck with this!

    To avoid an invasion in the future, a marine is tasked by a mysterious entity to recover hidden alien artifacts spread through the past.?

    Hope that helps, good luck with this!

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  2. Posted: January 19, 2014In:

    When a cocky self made but failing porn producer unknowingly uses stolen money to make the worlds best pornographic film, he must fight off the gangsters who claim it's their property

    Richiev Singularity

    I have to agree with the "Fight off" part. it is vague, good call dpg. As for what's at stake, it's the film. The film is his work and the gangsters want to take it from him. however if the film was a means to an end. (The money from the film being used to pay for his father surgery or something) itRead more

    I have to agree with the “Fight off” part. it is vague, good call dpg.

    As for what’s at stake, it’s the film. The film is his work and the gangsters want to take it from him. however if the film was a means to an end. (The money from the film being used to pay for his father surgery or something) it could up the stakes.

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  3. Posted: January 22, 2014In:

    When lonely long-haul truck driver D Forde falls in love online with a city writer and single mother, he must cross more than the Nullarbor to overcome his fear of abandonment and win her heart.

    Richiev Singularity

    Since you are writing a story based on actual events, I'm simply going to consolidate what you wrote to reduce the word count. ----- "When a lonely truck driver falls for a disenchanted city writer, he must cross more than the outback to overcome his fear of abandonment and win her heart." ----- I cRead more

    Since you are writing a story based on actual events, I’m simply going to consolidate what you wrote to reduce the word count.
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    “When a lonely truck driver falls for a disenchanted city writer, he must cross more than the outback to overcome his fear of abandonment and win her heart.”
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    I changed Nullarbor to Outback because I have no idea what Nullabor is 🙂

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