1. Posted: September 18, 2013

    Tom and Phyllis fall in love soon after she talks him into signing a contract with her network to shoot his death – of a terminal disease – on live TV.

    Richiev Singularity

    Solid premise for a story. However: Unless the characters are famous, using names just confuses the logline and tells us nothing about the characters. How about this, "After a no nonsense TV producer convinces a free spirited cancer victim to allow his death to be shown on live TV, complications ariRead more

    Solid premise for a story. However:

    Unless the characters are famous, using names just confuses the logline and tells us nothing about the characters.

    How about this,

    “After a no nonsense TV producer convinces a free spirited cancer victim to allow his death to be shown on live TV, complications arise when the two fall in love.”

    Hope that helped, good luck with this!

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  2. Posted: September 17, 2013In:

    On the verge of striking it rich an intergalactic diamond huntress is summoned to earth for compulsory breeding, but she is kidnapped by a ruthless space pirate en-route and must fight for her freedom to make it home before she is sentenced to death.

    Richiev Singularity

    You have presented two inciting incidents, That is why your logline is a little long. 1) being summoned to earth 2) being kidnapped. I think I would go with kidnapped.

    You have presented two inciting incidents, That is why your logline is a little long.

    1) being summoned to earth
    2) being kidnapped.

    I think I would go with kidnapped.

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  3. Posted: September 15, 2013In:

    While appraising old and rare books at a restored colonial plantation, a book collector stumbles across a series of diaries that chronicle an alien visitation in 1781.

    Richiev Singularity

    This is more of a set-up for a story than a logline, however it does set it up well. Is the book collector the main character or is it about a character in 1781? Just curious

    This is more of a set-up for a story than a logline, however it does set it up well.

    Is the book collector the main character or is it about a character in 1781?

    Just curious

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