1. Posted: June 22, 2013In:

    A firefly seeks all forms to save his mother who was kidnapped by two greedy spiders. They use light of fireflies as decoys to attract insects, thus they get more food.

    Richiev Singularity

    First: you need to drop the second sentence, The idea is good for the script but unneeded for the logline. Second: "Seeks all forms" is weird. it needs to be changed. Other than that, I can see this as a movie. A few changes to the logline should better help sell the premise. Hope that helped, goodRead more

    First: you need to drop the second sentence, The idea is good for the script but unneeded for the logline.

    Second: “Seeks all forms” is weird. it needs to be changed.

    Other than that, I can see this as a movie. A few changes to the logline should better help sell the premise.

    Hope that helped, good luck with this!
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    “After his mother is kidnapped by two greedy spiders, a heartbroken firefly enlists the help of a wisecracking Ant and a kung-fu Praying Mantis in order to rescue her.”

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  2. Posted: June 23, 2013In:

    When a hyper-connected, workaholic single woman swears off the Internet and her smartphone for Lent, her whole life goes to hell in a handbasket.

    Richiev Singularity

    I like this logine. While it isn't quite the traditional logline it gets it's point across and I get a feel for the story.

    I like this logine. While it isn’t quite the traditional logline it gets it’s point across and I get a feel for the story.

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  3. Posted: June 22, 2013In:

    An email from a stranger threatening to erase his very existence forces a reclusive writer to post his very first logline–accidentally opening a portal to a demon universe, where he finally finds true love!

    Richiev Singularity

    lol, I see you got the e-mail as well.

    lol, I see you got the e-mail as well.

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