1. Posted: October 2, 2020In:

    After a long career, a retired sheriff in the old west is forced to defend himself against war crime allegations from the civil war. Dividing the town and discrediting his legacy.

    Richiev Singularity

    Or perhaps 'civil war crime accusations'

    Or perhaps ‘civil war crime accusations’

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  2. Posted: October 2, 2020In:

    After a long career, a retired sheriff in the old west is forced to defend himself against war crime allegations from the civil war. Dividing the town and discrediting his legacy.

    Richiev Singularity

    I think it's a solid premise and logline. Here are some minor changes without changing it too much. ------------------------------------------ "After a storied career, a renown sheriff is forced to defend himself against civil war crimes, dividing his town and threatening his legacy."

    I think it’s a solid premise and logline. Here are some minor changes without changing it too much.
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    “After a storied career, a renown sheriff is forced to defend himself against civil war crimes, dividing his town and threatening his legacy.”

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  3. Posted: September 30, 2020In:

    A lonely and renegade pigeon must abandon his reluctance and join the other park residents to expose a corrupt official, stop construction of the mall and save the old fountain, before the end of Independence Day.

    Richiev Singularity

    A lonely and renegade pigeon must abandon his reluctance and join the other park residents to expose a corrupt official, You should switch this around: "When a corrupt official (Does this thing) a renegade pigeon must..." (Then tell us what he must do)

    A lonely and renegade pigeon must abandon his reluctance and join the other park residents to expose a corrupt official,

    You should switch this around:

    “When a corrupt official (Does this thing) a renegade pigeon must…” (Then tell us what he must do)

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