1. Posted: January 21, 2013In:

    Faced with the prospect of being forced into early retirement, a tough female detective agrees to an undercover operation: To infiltrate the life of a respected London gangster. The case hits a snag when she falls in love with her mark.

    Richiev Singularity

    How about this: "Face with early retirement, a tough female detective agrees to infiltrate the life of a respected London gangster but hits a snag when she falls for her Mark."

    How about this:

    “Face with early retirement, a tough female detective agrees to infiltrate the life of a respected London gangster but hits a snag when she falls for her Mark.”

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  2. Posted: January 19, 2013In:

    When Alice finally realizes her students are all idiots and her co-workers are losers, she decidest to get together with Amanda and Megan for some after school drinks.

    Richiev Singularity

    There is not story here. you are describing a scene and a little bit of set up to the scene.

    There is not story here. you are describing a scene and a little bit of set up to the scene.

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  3. Posted: January 19, 2013In:

    Three out of work friends pull an unorthodox heist to fund the fishing trip of a lifetime but only one of them gets away.

    Richiev Singularity

    If "Only one of them gets away" is how the movie ends you are not going to want to put that in the logline.

    If “Only one of them gets away” is how the movie ends you are not going to want to put that in the logline.

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