1. Posted: February 4, 2020In:

    A reclusive, homesick fugitive is told that his son has gone missing. When he also discovers that his vengeful ex-partner in crime has tracked him down, he must come out of hiding in order to protect his true identity and save his son.

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    Richiev Singularity

    "When his vengeful ex-partner kidnaps his son, a fugitive from the mob must come out of hiding in order to rescue his child."

    “When his vengeful ex-partner kidnaps his son, a fugitive from the mob must come out of hiding in order to rescue his child.”

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  2. Posted: February 4, 2020In:

    When a devoted ex criminal desired to start a righteous past completes her prison term, she is dragged back into the criminal underworld after her son is kidnapped by her ex crime mob boss and forced to complete numerous tasks, before he ends up dead.

    Richiev Singularity

    One good way to look at a story is to ask, What is the overall goal of the lead character? In your story, the goal of the lead character is to save her son. Therefore what sets the story in motion would be, her son being kidnapped. Now that we know what sets the story in motion we can begin to see aRead more

    One good way to look at a story is to ask, What is the overall goal of the lead character?

    In your story, the goal of the lead character is to save her son.

    Therefore what sets the story in motion would be, her son being kidnapped.

    Now that we know what sets the story in motion we can begin to see a logline. Because that event is what starts the logline.

    “When her son is kidnapped, an ex-con trying to go straight, must…” (Then tell us your lead characters plan-but not whether it succeeds or not so you don’t give away the ending)

    Now we have a beginning, and also, because your lead character wants to go straight, we also have internal conflict because she may have to do illegal things to save her son. (And internal conflict is great)

    To review, the beginning and the end of a story should be like mirror images.

     

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  3. Posted: February 3, 2020In:

    After feeling doubtful of finding love again, a sexy ex convict finds interests in a pro boxer who returns the same feelings, but their love is intercepted when her ex best friend, who’s a former investigator responsible for taking her in the first place, seeks out to find her and confess her feelings before it’s too late. possible title: “Les Be Honest”

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    This is a bit confusing to read. I think the starting point would be, what is the lead character's actual goal? What is standing in the way, and what will the lead character do to overcome this obstacle. Because from reading your logline, the investigator seems to be the one with the goal: To win baRead more

    This is a bit confusing to read.

    I think the starting point would be, what is the lead character’s actual goal? What is standing in the way, and what will the lead character do to overcome this obstacle.

    Because from reading your logline, the investigator seems to be the one with the goal: To win back the ex-convict… and has a plan: to confess his love. But what is standing in his way is: he’s the one that put her in prison…

    So the inciting incident would be, his sexy ex is getting out of prison, his goal is to win her back, and his action is, to confess his love.

    So if your lead character is the Ex-convict, what is her inciting incident, what is her goal, and what is standing in her way?

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