1. Posted: July 2, 2019In:

    A shy guy tries to seduce a snobby girl during an awkward pre-arranged mating session between their chihuahua dogs. COMEDY SHORT

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    For a short I like the premise, two shy people meet to allow their dogs to mate, it's embarrassing so they engage in small talk while behind them you hear the mating noises. As for the logline, this is a little tougher, the line, "Must deal with the situation" is not very specific. How does he speciRead more

    For a short I like the premise, two shy people meet to allow their dogs to mate, it’s embarrassing so they engage in small talk while behind them you hear the mating noises.

    As for the logline, this is a little tougher, the line, “Must deal with the situation” is not very specific. How does he specifically deal with the situation?

    Is his objective to just get through the situation?

    Is his goal to put his counterpart at ease?

    Is his goal to get a date from the girl?

    Anyway, I like this premise as a short or even just as a skit,? but you might want to add a specific or two, to the logline.

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  2. Posted: July 3, 2019In:

    While on a routine mission, the angel of death awakens the wrath of the apocalypse and must travel through hell to find his redemption.

    Richiev Singularity

    How will traveling through hell help the angel find redemption? You might need some sort of specific at this part of the logline. Does the angel have a suitcase, take pictures with his iphone and maybe stop at some of the tourist attractions? What does the angel do during his travels through hell? NRead more

    How will traveling through hell help the angel find redemption?

    You might need some sort of specific at this part of the logline.

    Does the angel have a suitcase, take pictures with his iphone and maybe stop at some of the tourist attractions? What does the angel do during his travels through hell?

    Now if the Angel must kill or stop a specific demon in hell that would probably make more sense. If that’s the case you might want to add that specific to your logline.

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  3. Posted: June 30, 2019In:

    Visited by the ghost of the 1940?s Hollywood icon she?s about to portray, a movie star journeys back in time to get her part right and get her Oscar.

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    Sounds like the lead character found a solution to her problem. The lead wants to win an Oscar and so she travels back in time to observe the real icon in action... problem solvedSo where is the conflict?What stands in the leads way?I only ask this because adding the main conflict of the story willRead more

    Sounds like the lead character found a solution to her problem. The lead wants to win an Oscar and so she travels back in time to observe the real icon in action… problem solved

    So where is the conflict?

    What stands in the leads way?

    I only ask this because adding the main conflict of the story will strengthen your logline.

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