1. Posted: December 25, 2018In:

    After being threatened by an unknown adversary, a vampire warlord if forced to move against his rivals else it would mean certain death for him and his kin.

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    Lead characters are pro-active, your lead character is reactive. When something bad happens, a lead character will come up with a plan of action: A goal... He may succeed, he may fail, that is not needed in the logline, but the goal or the plan of action is needed.

    Lead characters are pro-active, your lead character is reactive.

    When something bad happens, a lead character will come up with a plan of action: A goal…
    He may succeed, he may fail, that is not needed in the logline, but the goal or the plan of action is needed.

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  2. Posted: December 25, 2018In:

    A Facebook friend request, changes the life of a man undergoing mid life crisis, as he discovers, his former best friend, is a hitman.

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    "When he discovers?his childhood friend is a hitman, a bored middle-aged man..." (Then tell us what he does about it)

    “When he discovers?his childhood friend is a hitman, a bored middle-aged man…” (Then tell us what he does about it)

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  3. Posted: December 24, 2018In:

    In a future where the average citizen is controlled by a master super-computer: when he accidentally steps into a time warp to 2019, a cyborg discovers murderous urges he never knew he had and goes on a killing spree.

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    What is the goal of the lead character?

    What is the goal of the lead character?

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