1. Posted: December 11, 2018In:

    Based on true events, a lonesome Sheriff?s lieutenant takes a supernatural, spiritual journey while attempting to unravel a conspiracy involving unsolved murders and missing persons and, in the process, has his cynical worldview turned upside down.

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    In the Wizard of Oz Dorothy?has an inner journey. At the beginning of the film she just wants to get away from her small town, however, after all her adventures she realizes there is no place like home.Dorothy also has an outward journey, After getting swept up by a tornado she must follow a yellowRead more

    In the Wizard of Oz Dorothy?has an inner journey. At the beginning of the film she just wants to get away from her small town, however, after all her adventures she realizes there is no place like home.

    Dorothy also has an outward journey, After getting swept up by a tornado she must follow a yellow brick road to a wizard whom she is told can get her home.

    Inner Journey logline:? “A small-town Kansas girl goes through a journey?of self-discovery, and through a series of events comes to the conclusion there is no place like home.”

    outer Journey?logline:? “When a tornado transports her to a magical land, a small-town Kansas girl must follow a yellow brick road in order to find the wizard with the power to get her home.”

    If you were to read the inner journey logline, you would have no idea what the Wizzard of Oz is actually about.
    Which is why most loglines are about the outer journey story. They are about the events that happen on the screen, not the feelings and thoughts the character is having.

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  2. Posted: December 8, 2018In:

    Not sure what to put in this field not seeing it active in other loglines published

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    When a massive fire forces him and his mother to seek shelter in a small town, an ex-convict must... (Then tell us what he must do. Escape? Kill his father? Get to the authorities?)

    When a massive fire forces him and his mother to seek shelter in a small town, an ex-convict must… (Then tell us what he must do. Escape? Kill his father? Get to the authorities?)

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  3. Posted: December 5, 2018In:

    When an FBI agent comes in contact with someone’s mind altering dark side, she must make to tough decision to kill him and end the monster’s destructive ways or face the consequences of her actions of letting him live.

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    Making a decision describes a scene. A logline describes a plot.What is the plot about?Does the psychic kill someone and the FBI agent is tasked with tracking the bad guy down; and the story ends with the confrontation described in your logline?Does the story begin when she comes in contact with theRead more

    Making a decision describes a scene. A logline describes a plot.
    What is the plot about?

    Does the psychic kill someone and the FBI agent is tasked with tracking the bad guy down; and the story ends with the confrontation described in your logline?
    Does the story begin when she comes in contact with the psychic and the story is about the consequences of her letting him live and what she must do about it?

    In other words, does the scene in your logline describe your inciting incident or does it describe the climax?

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