1. Posted: October 20, 2018In:

    Two recently graduated teens take a summer road trip across the country to find who they are and who they want to be.

    Richiev Singularity

    I enjoy a good road movie. However, as others have said, you are missing the hook in your logline. (The thing that will make people want to read your script.) That doesn't mean there isn't a good hook in your story, it's just that it isn't coming through in your logline.

    I enjoy a good road movie. However, as others have said, you are missing the hook in your logline. (The thing that will make people want to read your script.)
    That doesn’t mean there isn’t a good hook in your story, it’s just that it isn’t coming through in your logline.

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  2. Posted: October 20, 2018In:

    A young teen decides to run away from home in order to escape the abuses from his father.

    Richiev Singularity

    Is the story about him trying to leave the house? Or is the story about what happens after he runs away? I can't tell from this logline.

    Is the story about him trying to leave the house? Or is the story about what happens after he runs away? I can’t tell from this logline.

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  3. Posted: October 19, 2018In:

    Kidnapped and caged, ten people are going to be killed one at a time until they identify the two traitors in their group, which will secure their release.

    Richiev Singularity

    Who are they traitors to?

    Who are they traitors to?

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