1. Posted: October 15, 2018In:

    After his home planet were destroyed by space ronins, the last gun-wielding cyber-samurai must track down and kill an old foe who intends to erase all life and create a new universe using a dangerous alien weapon.

    Richiev Singularity

    I really like this concept; take a Japanize?Samurai?movie and set it in space.You have an order of Samurai who are kind of like the 'Jedi Order' in star wars.they are men of honor and keep the law.You have an evil warlord who sends his minions to attack the lead character's planet.Now the Samurai muRead more

    I really like this concept; take a Japanize?Samurai?movie and set it in space.

    You have an order of Samurai who are kind of like the ‘Jedi Order’ in star wars.
    they are men of honor and keep the law.

    You have an evil warlord who sends his minions to attack the lead character’s planet.

    Now the Samurai must go on a journey of honor to avenge his people’s death.

    You?would create a couple mini-bosses?(To use a video game term) that he must fight through first.
    Maybe each mini-boss is on a different planet or space station and after he defeats them
    the lead character would gain a clue as to the whereabouts of the evil warlord.

    All culminating in the final showdown. The epic duel between the lead character and the warlord.

    One possible big reveal: Perhaps the evil Warlord
    is actually the lead character’s brother, who everybody believed was dead.

    They fight. Good guy wins. Roll credits.

    I think the whole universe-destroying weapon seems to come out of nowhere and could actually be a distraction
    from the more personal story of revenge and honor; however, if you are determined to tell that story, it could be added in.

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  2. Posted: October 17, 2018In:

    Two middle-aged misfits wrestle with their selective memories as they retrace the steps of a wild teenage holiday hoping to find their dead friend?s estranged son.

    Richiev Singularity

    "When their best friend dies, two octagenarians must track down his wild son, but following the clues is complicated by a severe case of 'old timers' "

    “When their best friend dies, two octagenarians must track down his wild son, but following the clues is complicated by a severe case of ‘old timers’ “

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  3. Posted: October 15, 2018In:

    When she begins dating a man twenty years her senior, an idealist teen must convince her overprotective parents he?s Mr. Right after they objected to his presence at a family dinner.

    Richiev Singularity

    You added an element that completely changes the story.In your last attempt, the issue was the age difference between her and her boyfriend, now, in this attempt, the issue is not that he is older but that he is perceived to be a trafficker.This change will mean the whole logline must be changed aroRead more

    You added an element that completely changes the story.

    In your last attempt, the issue was the age difference between her and her boyfriend, now, in this attempt, the issue is not that he is older but that he is perceived to be a trafficker.

    This change will mean the whole logline must be changed around that element.

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