1. Posted: February 5, 2018In:

    The harsh realities of the Wild West challenges a New York marshal’s stoicism when he searches for a fugitive he must capture alive to earn a spot in the Secret Service.

    Richiev Singularity

    You should make this a little more personal... Either tell us how the fugitive personally hurt the lead character, or tell us why it means so much to the lead to join the secret service. Either one will help the logline.

    You should make this a little more personal… Either tell us how the fugitive personally hurt the lead character, or tell us why it means so much to the lead to join the secret service. Either one will help the logline.

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  2. Posted: February 5, 2018In:

    A young female werecat discovers she is in love with her best friend while trying to prevent the end of the world.

    Richiev Singularity

    You should tell us the specific threat to the world Then tell us what the lead character must do to save the world And if possible give us a hint on how the lead being a werecat will help in achieving this goal. I think doing this will improve your logline

    You should tell us the specific threat to the world
    Then tell us what the lead character must do to save the world
    And if possible give us a hint on how the lead being a werecat will help in achieving this goal.

    I think doing this will improve your logline

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  3. Posted: February 5, 2018In:

    two elderly ladies rooming together at a nursing home becomes best friends regardless of their odd personalities.

    Richiev Singularity

    Story is conflict, you have given us no conflict

    Story is conflict, you have given us no conflict

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