1. Posted: August 6, 2017In:

    A workaholic midwife becomes pregnant with twins after a drunken one night stand and with the help of her friends adjusts to her new life as a mother.

    Richiev Singularity

    You should give us a stronger goal, or possibly some stakes."When she becomes pregnant on the verge of a promotion, a single workaholic business woman must complete a multi-Billion dollar merger, all while negotiating her pregnancy and ?a rival looking looking to take advantage of any misstep."

    You should give us a stronger goal, or possibly some stakes.

    “When she becomes pregnant on the verge of a promotion, a single workaholic business woman must complete a multi-Billion dollar merger, all while negotiating her pregnancy and ?a rival looking looking to take advantage of any misstep.”

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  2. Posted: August 6, 2017In:

    [Not a logline] Does the dark night of the soul occur in act 2, act 3 or in a secret middle place?

    Richiev Singularity

    It comes right before the big finale. Think "Team America World Police" (A masterpiece of structure)

    It comes right before the big finale. Think “Team America World Police” (A masterpiece of structure)

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  3. Posted: August 4, 2017In:

    An Amature Drug-dealer decides to sell drugs by Dark Web, But he realizes it is not like he thought.

    Richiev Singularity

    You need a goal people can relate to. Selling drugs sounds more like a means than and end. What is his purpose? What is he trying to achieve? Adding that element to your logline will help improve it.

    You need a goal people can relate to.

    Selling drugs sounds more like a means than and end.

    What is his purpose? What is he trying to achieve?

    Adding that element to your logline will help improve it.

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