1. Posted: May 3, 2017In:

    A desperately lonely woman is unknowingly trapped in purgatory until her grieving husband is finally able to let her go

    Richiev Singularity

    I agree with Dk, The problem; if the woman is the lead character, she is not in control. Events are happening to her instead of her causing the action and in ?a story a lead character or pro-active.

    I agree with Dk,

    The problem; if the woman is the lead character, she is not in control. Events are happening to her instead of her causing the action and in ?a story a lead character or pro-active.

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  2. Posted: May 2, 2017In:

    A color blind pianist makes it rain every time he plays his symphonies. One melody at a time, he fills colors in the lives of people who listen to him play. On his last show, he mistakenly opens the door to his painful past. If the show must go on, he has to face his demons and let the light prevail.

    Richiev Singularity

    If you shorten the logline and give specifics it improve this logline. Also, i don't understand how 'colorblind' correlates to music. However, If he was deaf I would understand who it could affect the story,

    If you shorten the logline and give specifics it improve this logline.

    Also, i don’t understand how ‘colorblind’ correlates to music. However, If he was deaf I would understand who it could affect the story,

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  3. Posted: May 2, 2017In:

    A 45 year old homemaker finds herself on the verge of an ugly divorce. With her estranged relationships and a broken heart, she tumbles further down when is left bereft of an alimony. To leave behind rock bottom, she must discover herself and start a new life.

    Richiev Singularity

    "Left destitute by her ex-husband, a homemaker must enter the workforce for the first time and learn to become self sufficient if she is to survive."

    “Left destitute by her ex-husband, a homemaker must enter the workforce for the first time and learn to become self sufficient if she is to survive.”

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