1. Posted: April 28, 2017In:

    A Estranged Father is kidnapped by his business partner in NYC, He must escape to reconcile with his kids or die regarding in a small old apartment.

    Best Answer
    Richiev Singularity

    This is a step forward. It is in the present tense and the lead has a goal. Much betterHowever; I am confused about the part where you wrote "...or die regarding in a small old apartment". I am not sure what that means. If it's important to the plot you should re-word it. If not I would drop that paRead more

    This is a step forward. It is in the present tense and the lead has a goal. Much better

    However; I am confused about the part where you wrote “…or die regarding in a small old apartment”. I am not sure what that means. If it’s important to the plot you should re-word it. If not I would drop that part.

    See less
    • 0
  2. Posted: April 28, 2017In:

    A find of ancient coins triggers a cold case investigation back to Nazi Germany, which culminates in a hot chase of a Gestapo officers murdering grandson.

    Richiev Singularity

    In a story, one of the most important elements is a lead character. It isn't just a series of events. The lead character should be compelling and have a goal. The lead character forces the action and isn't passive. The lead character is who the audience connects with and roots for. As a result one oRead more

    In a story, one of the most important elements is a lead character. It isn’t just a series of events. The lead character should be compelling and have a goal. The lead character forces the action and isn’t passive. The lead character is who the audience connects with and roots for.

    As a result one of the most important aspects of a logline is the lead character… every logline should have one.

    See less
    • 0
  3. Posted: April 28, 2017In:

    When a senior Barrister?s reputation is threatened by Alzheimer’s disease, he must enlist his estranged Barrister son, to secretly help him conduct a murder trial.

    Richiev Singularity

    Interesting Idea, but from reading your logline, I would wonder why the estranged son isn't the lead character since he would be the active character, the one conducting the trial.

    Interesting Idea, but from reading your logline, I would wonder why the estranged son isn’t the lead character since he would be the active character, the one conducting the trial.

    See less
    • 0