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When demons plan to steal the devils throne, a greedy rich lawyer dealing for his soul is the only one able to do something about it.
I only mention it because you describe your lead as a greedy, rich, lawyer. None of those things would endear the reader to your lead. As a result, what is it about the story which will captivate the reader to want the lead character to succeed? Why should the audience care?Why should we care if demRead more
I only mention it because you describe your lead as a greedy, rich, lawyer. None of those things would endear the reader to your lead. As a result, what is it about the story which will captivate the reader to want the lead character to succeed? Why should the audience care?
Why should we care if demons rule the throne of Hell or if the Devil does? What are the stakes?
See lessWhen demons plan to steal the devils throne, a greedy rich lawyer dealing for his soul is the only one able to do something about it.
Just curious but do you have a sympathetic character for the audience to cheer for and want to succeed? If so the logline should be written from their prospective.
Just curious but do you have a sympathetic character for the audience to cheer for and want to succeed? If so the logline should be written from their prospective.
See lessSinister things start to happen in Dave’s house after he hangs up a painting he received from an anonymous sender.
This is a situation, the story would be what does he do about it. I also agree with dpg, instead of just saying 'sinister things start to happen' you should give us a specific example. Do voices tell the lead to kill? Do the walls begin to bleed? Does Donald Trumps hair jump out of the TV and attackRead more
This is a situation, the story would be what does he do about it.
I also agree with dpg, instead of just saying ‘sinister things start to happen’ you should give us a specific example. Do voices tell the lead to kill? Do the walls begin to bleed? Does Donald Trumps hair jump out of the TV and attack the lead character? One specific is better than a hundred vague’s.
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