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A temporary infection storms over the world. Eight strangers are trapped in a restaurant and start experiencing the outcomes of the infection. At each 15 minutes they trade bodies with each other, and their memories go back to when the infection started, leaving they unaware of who they really are.
This seems more like the incident that sets the story in motion rather than the story itself. I think what they do about this situation would be the story. The lead character usually has a goal and there is something standing in the way of that goal. I would express the goal and the opposition to thRead more
This seems more like the incident that sets the story in motion rather than the story itself. I think what they do about this situation would be the story.
The lead character usually has a goal and there is something standing in the way of that goal. I would express the goal and the opposition to the goal in the logline and it will be much improved.
See lessCelebrity hairdresser was falsely accused for kidnapping a secret son of the mayor of New York and he has to deliver him to a real kidnappers to save the life of his mother because of her large gambling debt.
A quick point that will help your logline. A logline should be written in the present tense. "When a celebrity hairdresser 'is' falsely accused..." The reason for this is that things happen on the screen right now.
A quick point that will help your logline. A logline should be written in the present tense. “When a celebrity hairdresser ‘is’ falsely accused…”
The reason for this is that things happen on the screen right now.
See lessWhen the wildest gunslinger in the west is wanted dead, an underemployed ranch-hand sets out to capture him alive for the biggest cash reward.
I was thinking about this story, I believe an interesting inciting incident that would be: The gunslinger steals the lead characters beloved horse. Maybe the horse has sentimental value to the lead character. Now the ranch hand is determined to get the horse back at all cost. (Maybe he doesn't evenRead more
I was thinking about this story, I believe an interesting inciting incident that would be: The gunslinger steals the lead characters beloved horse. Maybe the horse has sentimental value to the lead character. Now the ranch hand is determined to get the horse back at all cost. (Maybe he doesn’t even care about the reward money, all he wants is the horse back)
Standing in the way of his goal would be a specific ruthless bounty hunter that keeps getting in the way because he believes the lead character is trying to steal his mark.
Then add a goal for the gunslinger. He must be in (This old west city) by a specific time. (Which is why he stole the horse)
Finally give the ranch hand one useful skill, His father was an expert tracker and he grew up learning how to track from him.
So now you have a three way duel. The Gunslinger must be in (Let’s say Dodge City) in three days and needs the horse to get there. The lead character is determined to get his horse back, and the bounty hunter is determined to stop the lead character because he believes the lead is a rival bounty hunter and he is determined to kill the gunslinger who is wanted dead or alive.
Whew… just some thoughts.
Good luck with this!
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