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An introverted bookworm returns to her country hometown to find that her younger brother is dating the girl who made her life hell in high school and they must work together to survive a zombie apocalypse.
You have given us a situation but not a story. The story would be what she does once she finds herself in this situation.?
You have given us a situation but not a story. The story would be what she does once she finds herself in this situation.
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See lessWhen a gifted nostalgia caseworker disappears, a Man and Woman use their third-mind to relate clues sifted via ghost impressions rising from the dust around them.
A lot of terms in this logline; nostalgia caseworker, third-mind, ghost impressions,?as a result of having three unusual terms, the logline can be a bit hard to read.But let's set that asideThe best way to improve this logline would be to add some stakes. Why is it so important to find the nostalgiaRead more
A lot of terms in this logline; nostalgia caseworker, third-mind, ghost impressions,?as a result of having three unusual terms, the logline can be a bit hard to read.
But let’s set that aside
The best way to improve this logline would be to add some stakes. Why is it so important to find the nostalgia caseworker? More important, why is it important to the lead characters? What will they gain if they discover the lost person, what will they lose if they don’t?
In other words, you are telling us, what the lead characters are doing, but you are not telling us why they are doing it. In a logline the ‘why‘ will often be what hooks the readers.
Hope that helped.
See lessWhen his sister goes missing during a murderous rampage in a haunted house, an immature teenager must take on the responsibility of finding her before the killer does, but not all is as it seems.
"When a psycho begins a killing rampage in his rural neighborhood, a small town boy disobeys his parents and braves the streets?to?search for his missing sister in the hopes of finding her before the killer."
“When a psycho begins a killing rampage in his rural neighborhood, a small town boy disobeys his parents and braves the streets?to?search for his missing sister in the hopes of finding her before the killer.”
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