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?In order to help create an international antiterrorism taskforce, the D. o. D. Director of Psychological Operations Dr. Samantha Ryan struggles to overcome her ex husband and the terrorists with whom he is associated.?
I have been following the attempts to create a logline for this story for a while. I think my problem with coming up with one is that I am not sure what the lead character must do "Struggles to overcome" doesn't tell us what she must do. Also it seems as if things are happening to the lead characterRead more
I have been following the attempts to create a logline for this story for a while.
I think my problem with coming up with one is that I am not sure what the lead character must do
“Struggles to overcome” doesn’t tell us what she must do.
Also it seems as if things are happening to the lead character instead of the lead character being proactive.
After her husband sabotages her submarine what must the lead character do?
Is there a bomb she must find?
Does she have fix the sub?
Does she have to discover who is a mole working for her husband?
Once we know what the lead character must do, it will be easier for us to create a logline attempt.
Here would be an example of a character having to do something:
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“When her vengeful ex-husband sabotages her submarine, a claustrophobic D.O.D officer must discover which crew member is the mole if she’s to discover her ex’s location and the nuclear codes he stole.”
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obviously yours would be different.
Hope that helped
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Who is the lead character? From you logline it seems as if the domineering producer is the lead. However that seems like an odd choice so I was curious.You haven't give us any connection between the two online personalities sparking a romance, and why the producer wants to keep them apart. ThereforeRead more
Who is the lead character?
From you logline it seems as if the domineering producer is the lead. However that seems like an odd choice so I was curious.
You haven’t give us any connection between the two online personalities sparking a romance, and why the producer wants to keep them apart.
Therefore there seems to be a disconnect between the first half of the logline and the second half.
What will the domineering producer lose if he can’t keep them apart? What’s at stake? It should mean his entire world?
If the producer can’t keep them apart then it should mean his world will come crashing down around him.
and if so it should be expressed in the logline.
Hope this helped, good luck with this!
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How do you awaken a dream? This objective seems rather intangible.I could understand if your lead character had to unite three tribes and lead them into battle. Maybe each tribe sends him on an impossible quest before they accept him like they did his father, then I could understand what the lead chRead more
How do you awaken a dream? This objective seems rather intangible.
I could understand if your lead character had to unite three tribes and lead them into battle. Maybe each tribe sends him on an impossible quest before they accept him like they did his father, then I could understand what the lead character actually has to do.
But I am not sure how a character would ‘awaken a dream’ I would try a different objective for you lead character.
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
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