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Inflicted with PTSD from a young age, a mute street performer is abandoned by his troupe as France becomes occupied by the Nazi Wehrmacht. Faced with the choice to escape to neutral Switzerland or fight, he joins the French Resistance as a code-breaker and infiltrates the Nazi regime. His tactics shift when he learns what?s happening to the countless civilians going missing.
Compared to the original logline this attempt is more specific. I have a better understanding of the story from this logline. Now it's a matter of tightening it up.Try switching around the order: ----- "Abandoned by his troupe in WW2 a mute street performer with PTSD joins the resistance as a code bRead more
Compared to the original logline this attempt is more specific. I have a better understanding of the story from this logline. Now it’s a matter of tightening it up.
Try switching around the order:
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“Abandoned by his troupe in WW2 a mute street performer with PTSD joins the resistance as a code breaker, but as the battle lines near, he must overcome his trauma if he’s to crack the Nazi code and save the french town he now calls home.”
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If you are going to use PTSD as a character flaw it should be central to the story. He must overcome it if he’s to accomplish his goal. All the while bombs are falling from the sky.
Hope this helps, good luck with this!
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