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When a young bride gets cold feet, her grandmother who has multiple ex-husbands is the only one who can save the day
If the daughter is the lead character then you should give her a goal, or something she wants or needs. If the grandmother is the lead character, the logline should be told from her perspective. An example of the story told from the Grandmothers point of view: ----- "After her granddaughter get's coRead more
If the daughter is the lead character then you should give her a goal, or something she wants or needs.
If the grandmother is the lead character, the logline should be told from her perspective.
An example of the story told from the Grandmothers point of view:
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“After her granddaughter get’s cold feet, a free spirited grandmother recounts the ecstasy and tribulation of her own love life which led to meeting and losing the love of her life.”
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Hope that helped!
See lessAn overzealous father gives up on life after he causes a family tragedy; his selfless daughter battling with her own pain must cling onto her faith to save him.
1: 'Family tragedy' is impersonal and vague. 'death of his son' 'loss of their family home' 'death of his wife', is more personal. It will help draw in the reader of your logline if you are specific what the tragedy actually is. 2: It seem from the logline the daughter is the main character, so theRead more
1: ‘Family tragedy’ is impersonal and vague. ‘death of his son’ ‘loss of their family home’ ‘death of his wife’, is more personal. It will help draw in the reader of your logline if you are specific what the tragedy actually is.
2: It seem from the logline the daughter is the main character, so the loglne should be written from her perspective not the fathers.
3: ‘Clinging onto faith’ isn’t very proactive. you should be more specific to what she actually does to save her father.
Anyway, it seem like a good idea for a story and with a few specifics, hopefully your logline will be as good as your story.
Hope that helped, good luck with this.
See lessAn overzealous father gives up on life after he causes a family tragedy; his selfless daughter battling with her own pain must cling onto her faith to save him.
1: 'Family tragedy' is impersonal and vague. 'death of his son' 'loss of their family home' 'death of his wife', is more personal. It will help draw in the reader of your logline if you are specific what the tragedy actually is. 2: It seem from the logline the daughter is the main character, so theRead more
1: ‘Family tragedy’ is impersonal and vague. ‘death of his son’ ‘loss of their family home’ ‘death of his wife’, is more personal. It will help draw in the reader of your logline if you are specific what the tragedy actually is.
2: It seem from the logline the daughter is the main character, so the loglne should be written from her perspective not the fathers.
3: ‘Clinging onto faith’ isn’t very proactive. you should be more specific to what she actually does to save her father.
Anyway, it seem like a good idea for a story and with a few specifics, hopefully your logline will be as good as your story.
Hope that helped, good luck with this.
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