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  1. Posted: October 2, 2015In: Action

    After missing a bank heist, a young gunman has to do battle with vengeful gangsters and his own Obsessive Compulsive Disorder.

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    Added an answer on October 7, 2015 at 8:15 am

    I would echo the comments of the first reviewer. ?And I would add he must battle gangsters for what? ?For his cut of the money? ?For power? ?For a girl? ?For his life?

    I would echo the comments of the first reviewer. ?And I would add he must battle gangsters for what? ?For his cut of the money? ?For power? ?For a girl? ?For his life?

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  2. Posted: September 30, 2015In: Comedy

    Three non-criminals out of pocket and out of luck hold up a convenient store to earn some much needed money.

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    Added an answer on October 2, 2015 at 8:15 am

    The above review is true - there are no stakes here. ?Out of money, aren't we all? ?What makes them different? ?Also, I would avoid "non-criminals". ?(Maybe upstanding citizens?) ?When I read it, my eyes only saw criminal, so I thought it's just three criminals holding up a convenience store. ?It soRead more

    The above review is true – there are no stakes here. ?Out of money, aren’t we all? ?What makes them different? ?Also, I would avoid “non-criminals”. ?(Maybe upstanding citizens?) ?When I read it, my eyes only saw criminal, so I thought it’s just three criminals holding up a convenience store. ?It sounds a little like The Full Monty, a movie that I love. ?And the friends all had different reasons for doing what they did. ?If we know their motivation, we can forgive their bad deed. ?More irony and a little more insight into why they need this money would go a long way. ?Keep us posted?

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  3. Posted: October 1, 2015In: Action

    A recent widow begins using the world?s most popular virtual reality game to escape the pain of real life, but when the game?s characters gain self awareness and start fighting back against the ?Human Invaders? she?ll need to find a way back to reality to survive.

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    Added an answer on October 2, 2015 at 7:31 am

    I'll start by saying this sounds really interesting. ?It's clearly stated and understandable. ?I think using the "world's most" insinuates that you want to use a specific game that the producer might not want to pay to gain the rights to. ?I might just say a popular virtual reality game (spelled outRead more

    I’ll start by saying this sounds really interesting. ?It’s clearly stated and understandable. ?I think using the “world’s most” insinuates that you want to use a specific game that the producer might not want to pay to gain the rights to. ?I might just say a popular virtual reality game (spelled out in case the person you are pitching to is not as tech-friendly as you might want them to be).

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