1. Posted: September 20, 2013In:

    When a young lawyer dies and is sent to hell, he is determined to break his way into heaven, or he will suffer for eternity./Kalle

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    Thanks for the suggestions! The reason I picked lawyer was that I felt I could come up with a work related reason for him to go to hell, and that I need him to be fairly clever, and therefore picked a profession that suggests he is. But I really like the idea of him having to "lawyer" his way out ofRead more

    Thanks for the suggestions! The reason I picked lawyer was that I felt I could come up with a work related reason for him to go to hell, and that I need him to be fairly clever, and therefore picked a profession that suggests he is. But I really like the idea of him having to “lawyer” his way out of there, rather than break. Thanks! /Kalle

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  2. Posted: May 10, 2013

    The death of their child prompts a grieving couple to perform a ritual that brings her back to life, but a violation of the ritual?s rules has horrific consequences for the couples friends and family.

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    You've got something here. But so far it's a tagline, not a logline. What you're missing is the action. Check out this blueprint: "When [event] happens, [the main character] must [do main action]". You've got the event; the ressurection gone wrong, you've got the main characters; the parents but whaRead more

    You’ve got something here. But so far it’s a tagline, not a logline.

    What you’re missing is the action. Check out this blueprint:
    “When [event] happens, [the main character] must [do main action]”.

    You’ve got the event; the ressurection gone wrong, you’ve got the main characters; the parents but what is their action?

    Hope that helps =)

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  3. Posted: May 10, 2013

    2019. Mexico is plungded into a Civil War. American Forces help the Loyalist forces escape from the war. 2021. America has split, the North and the South are at war. The Ex-president Marcerella now is a general of the US Joint-Forces unit known as the 6th Army. The Suth are beginig to gain ground and head towards Washington. 2022. Washington once the Capital of America now a battle ground. General Marcerella is the 2nd in command of all US forces in Washington. A platoon of one of his companies lead by Captain Jamerson head towards a new tactic… Survive. During the Platons Patrol, they get into a firefight with some Marines from the Elite CSMC 12th "Phoenix" Regiment, when an unatural earthquake causes the West Atlantic Fault. The Platoon have a matter of Hours to reach the Extraction point to fly back to Fort Safe(white House) before the Earthquake kills them all. 2023. a years after the earthquake the 6th Army have been given a special mission which is to invade Mexico to stop Mexican reinforcements help the Confederate (republican) States of America.

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    This, is not a logline. This is the text crawling at the opening of the movie. You know, like Star Wars. A logline is, in essence, a short summary of the film. What you've got here is all backstory. Boil it down to the core of the story: "When [insert event] happens, [Your hero] must [take a courseRead more

    This, is not a logline. This is the text crawling at the opening of the movie. You know, like Star Wars.

    A logline is, in essence, a short summary of the film. What you’ve got here is all backstory.
    Boil it down to the core of the story:
    “When [insert event] happens, [Your hero] must [take a course of action].”

    Hope that helps =)

    Gustaf/Storyutbildningen

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