1. Posted: February 20, 2020In:

    After his wife dies in a car accident, a man must face homelessness raising his three daughters.

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    Trix Samurai

    Should this be in Examples?

    Should this be in Examples?

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  2. Posted: February 20, 2020In:

    After his wife of 48 years asks for a divorce, an eccentric old codger embraces single life and modern dating in the search for a new girlfriend.

    Trix Samurai

    LOL - I can just imagine a 70/80 year old on Tinder! ?Or whatever the silver surfer version is - Silver Singles! (quick google haha). I think your logline pretty much says it all. ?The ticking clock of his old ticker due to expire is suggested in their age and the conflict of his eccentricity pitcheRead more

    LOL – I can just imagine a 70/80 year old on Tinder! ?Or whatever the silver surfer version is – Silver Singles! (quick google haha).

    I think your logline pretty much says it all. ?The ticking clock of his old ticker due to expire is suggested in their age and the conflict of his eccentricity pitched against modern dating methods is there.

    Are you testing an idea, or is it more fully fleshed out? ?I ask because I’m wondering if his wife ‘asking’ for a divorce is more a plea for attention or whether she actually walks out on him (he seems quick to embrace single life!)

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  3. Posted: February 18, 2020In:

    When a cavernous sinkhole opens up in a bustling city, a claustrophobic geologist leads a team of experts down to investigate, but when the sinkhole collapses, they find themselves trapped underground? and they?re not alone.

    Trix Samurai

    I like your premise - also the idea of changing genre and story part way through is really intriguing. ?Do you also change main character? ?Personally I love it when a hero bites the dust and another person steps in LOL. ?My thoughts are: As you're aiming to flip the story part way through - do youRead more

    I like your premise – also the idea of changing genre and story part way through is really intriguing. ?Do you also change main character? ?Personally I love it when a hero bites the dust and another person steps in LOL. ?My thoughts are:

    • As you’re aiming to flip the story part way through – do you need two inciting incidents? ?One for the first half – save the skyscraper… and one for the second half – get out alive…
    • When the sink hole actually collapses, you’d need to make sure that what was threatened in the first half (e.g. the skyscraper) either doesn’t actually collapse, or it is that which collapses and traps them underground?
    • “and they’re not alone” is a bit vague – it could mean many things… other people, another city, dinosaurs! I like the something wants them dead route.
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