1. Posted: March 16, 2013In:

    When a biochemical corporation manufactures implants that help millions live longer, they go from pariah to savior. But a longstanding critic remains unconvinced, and must battle the corporation and its backers to uncover the shocking secret behind the technology.

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    p.s. In the example I provided, you could replace "corporation" for "manufacturer".

    p.s.

    In the example I provided, you could replace “corporation” for “manufacturer”.

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  2. Posted: March 16, 2013In:

    When a biochemical corporation manufactures implants that help millions live longer, they go from pariah to savior. But a longstanding critic remains unconvinced, and must battle the corporation and its backers to uncover the shocking secret behind the technology.

    Tor Dollhouse

    "A (weakness & occupation)** uncovers a shocking secret behind a biochemical implant that help millions live longer and now must expose his findings before the corporation silences (him//her)**." Hope this helps :D

    “A (weakness & occupation)** uncovers a shocking secret behind a biochemical implant that help millions live longer and now must expose his findings before the corporation silences (him//her)**.”

    Hope this helps 😀

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  3. Posted: March 14, 2013In:

    A recent graduate nurse at a rehab clinic finds her addicted friend being used for inhumane experiments and must now save her before they both get trapped inside.

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    Heysa :D This is a cool concept and something I would watch if done right. "A recent graduate nurse.." feels a little clunky. Overall just needs to be worded a little differently and tightened. Happy writing.

    Heysa 😀

    This is a cool concept and something I would watch if done right.

    “A recent graduate nurse..” feels a little clunky.

    Overall just needs to be worded a little differently and tightened.

    Happy writing.

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