1. Posted: August 8, 2013In:

    Huntington?s disease suffer Jack, has discovered a power in which can prevent the death of his closest friend Gracie, he must defeat the odds and find a way to communicate or have to witness her deteriorate in front of him.

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    Hi, I like the idea but have a few questions. The first is around the disease. As Huntingtons is a degenerative disease I'm not sure how he could overcome it. Usually it progresses in stages, starting out subtly which wouldn't prevent your character from helping his friend and then growing in severiRead more

    Hi,

    I like the idea but have a few questions. The first is around the disease. As Huntingtons is a degenerative disease I’m not sure how he could overcome it. Usually it progresses in stages, starting out subtly which wouldn’t prevent your character from helping his friend and then growing in severity to physical and mental impairment, which unfortunately can’t be reversed (i believe). You may know more about the disease/studied it more than me so please ignore me if I’m wrong.

    If he had a psychological impairment however that he had to force himself to overcome that might provide a challenge that your hero has the ability to defeat. Maybe he hasn’t spoken in ten years. Then again, as I write this I realise that would make for a rather boring script because your hero wouldn’t speak until Act 3…but you get the idea.

    Also keen to know if he’s a doctor or in the field of science. Maybe he was once brilliant and has started to lose his esteem. This would make for an interesting character – in a similar fashion to A Beautiful Mind

    Good luck 🙂

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  2. Posted: August 8, 2013In:

    A lowly bartender planning her upcoming marriage has her Celebrity Free Pass, the one famous person she can sleep with without any consequences from her partner, walk into her bar, creating a world of problems for herself when she accepts his advances.

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    Hi, I've had a bash at condensing the story. I'm sure this isn't how you want it to read but gives an idea of how it could be shortened. I like the premise but the logline is just a bit long and difficult to read as it currently stands. A bartender is given approval to sleep with a Hollywood super sRead more

    Hi,

    I’ve had a bash at condensing the story. I’m sure this isn’t how you want it to read but gives an idea of how it could be shortened. I like the premise but the logline is just a bit long and difficult to read as it currently stands.

    A bartender is given approval to sleep with a Hollywood super star by her fiance only to find her life comes crashing down following the affair.

    Good luck

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  3. Posted: August 8, 2013In:

    Joseph, a wealthy but ailing patriarch organises a family gathering and announces that he intends to take his life at its conclusion. He asks his offspring for forgiveness for his past deeds and it is up to his favoured son David to unite the warring factions of the family and have them accept the apologies of his father before he passes away.

    wilsondownunder Penpusher

    Hi, Ive had a go at condensing your logline as it was a tad long. This is just an example of how you could reduce it down. Obviously you'll want to adjust it to your story. The son of a bitter wealthy man is forced to reunite his warring family and garner their forgiveness in order to gain an inheriRead more

    Hi,

    Ive had a go at condensing your logline as it was a tad long. This is just an example of how you could reduce it down. Obviously you’ll want to adjust it to your story.

    The son of a bitter wealthy man is forced to reunite his warring family and garner their forgiveness in order to gain an inheritance once their father passes.

    Thanks

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