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The House A family of four moves into a house in a small town only to find out there is more that meets the eye, the house sucks people alive.
What does the phrase "the house sucks people alive" mean? Now that the family knows the house is haunted, what must they do and why must they do it? Try building your logline along the following skeleton: When a [adjective] family of four moves into an [adjective] house and finds it haunted by [whatRead more
What does the phrase “the house sucks people alive” mean?
Now that the family knows the house is haunted, what must they do and why must they do it?
Try building your logline along the following skeleton:
When a [adjective] family of four moves into an [adjective] house and finds it haunted by [whatever], they must [do something] before [something bad happens].
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See lessAfter peeing on a stick, an aging party girl who has it all: the fiance, the house, the job .. and the crippling anxiety ? must decide if she?s ?old enough? to have her baby.
Since you posted this under comedy, I don't think it is a good idea for the logline to suggest abortion might be an option. I don't see how we can laugh at a woman confronted with that choice. Consider centering the objective goal on the woman overcoming her anxiety. Something like: When an aging paRead more
Since you posted this under comedy, I don’t think it is a good idea for the logline to suggest abortion might be an option. I don’t see how we can laugh at a woman confronted with that choice.
Consider centering the objective goal on the woman overcoming her anxiety. Something like:
When an aging party girl learns she is pregnant shortly before her wedding, she is gripped by a crippling anxiety and must overcome her fear of losing her current lifestyle before she can move on.
If you want to focus on the question of whether she keeps her baby or not, then you probably want to write a drama, not a comedy.
See lessAn aging party girl has it all: the fianc?, the house, the job.. and the crippling anxiety. Now she?s hiding a surprise pregnancy in order to get to know her bully mum, and if she has what it takes to be a better parent.
The first sentence is all setting and can be condensed to: "a woman with crippling anxiety".The second part I don't understand. How does hiding the pregnancy help her to get to know her mother? Wouldn't it be the other way around, the pregnancy brings them closer together?The final goal, wanting toRead more
The first sentence is all setting and can be condensed to: “a woman with crippling anxiety”.
The second part I don’t understand. How does hiding the pregnancy help her to get to know her mother? Wouldn’t it be the other way around, the pregnancy brings them closer together?
The final goal, wanting to be a better parent, is admirable, but a bit weak on the dramatic side. (We don’t know how well we do as parents until our kids are twenty-five and living on their own.) Is there one particular thing that her mother did that she hated as a child and she wants to understand why her mother did it? The more concrete you make the goal, the better the logline.
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