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Nicholas Andrew HallsSamurai
Posted: July 16, 20182018-07-16T11:50:41+10:00 2018-07-16T11:50:41+10:00In: Heist

After she’s dumped in a nursing-home because her family can’t afford her care, a meek grandmother and a motley-crew of exploited residents attempt to steal back enough money from the corrupt facility owners to return home.

After she’s dumped in a nursing-home because her family can’t afford her care, a meek grandmother and a motley-crew of exploited residents attempt to steal back enough money from the corrupt facility owners to return home.
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    1. variable Uberwriter
      2018-07-16T13:31:07+10:00Added an answer on July 16, 2018 at 1:31 pm

      If she’s “dumped” would she want to return? OR would her family receive her after she returns with the money? Maybe replace it with “sent to” to leave that as a possibility..

      How you make the ‘facility owners’ look like complete jerks, in order to justify that robbery – becomes the key. But here’s the rub… how can you justify the robbery If they still have the option to ‘simply leave’ for another facility?

      PS. which facility is it btw?

      Good Luck!!

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    2. Karel Segers Samurai
      2018-07-16T14:28:42+10:00Added an answer on July 16, 2018 at 2:28 pm

      I think the logline is great, but perhaps I would like to see something more exciting than ‘steal back enough money’.

      Can you make that more visual?

      Like ‘crack the safe in the owner’s yacht’, or something more appealing to our visual imagination…

      In this logline, the film seems to fall in that long line of movies that are about ‘getting enough money to right a wrong’.

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    3. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2018-07-16T17:07:44+10:00Added an answer on July 16, 2018 at 5:07 pm

      Agree with all comments. I think this sounds like a great idea. Does the meek grandmother lead the motley-crew? If so I would include that detail or at least suggest why this grandmother is instrumental to this heist.

      In what way are the residents exploited?

      I’m guessing that the grandmother needs care other than just the relatives looking after her hence why they can’t afford her care? Usually the care home is the more expensive option.

      Agree with variable that ‘mob-affiliated’ should be included – it adds another layer and immediately gives us the impression that they are getting what they deserve.

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    4. Valentin Samurai
      2018-07-16T18:29:47+10:00Added an answer on July 16, 2018 at 6:29 pm

      Why would the crew assemble in order to go home, when clearly they are enjoying each other company. It make more sense to have them fight to keep their retirement home open. For example, the corrupt new owners maybe trying to sell at a profit the retirement facilities by converting it into a new tourist resort. That would make the retirees homeless and broke, because they would have paid upfront. But in order to that, they may need to have the number of residents fall below a certain number, hence making their life miserable.

      When gangsters steal the land deed of their retirement resort, a meek grandmother and a motley crew of exploited resident must organise a heist to retrieve it or face being homeless and destitute.

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    5. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2018-07-16T19:12:43+10:00Added an answer on July 16, 2018 at 7:12 pm

      Thinking along the lines of recent successful films that dealt with similar subject matter I can only come up with Best Marigold Hotel. While I like the crime twist you’re adding, it might work better if you leaned more towards black comedy or comedy/thriller.

      The goal seems a bit problematic, I think it’s because them back home means their families could put them back in another facility in the future.

      What if the oldies would fight for their independence in the facility?
      For example, if the grandmother is already a resident and the inciting incident is the mob purchase the facility to exploit the elderly. The grandmother tells her family about the bad people but they don’t believe her and put it down to dementia. Now she must put together her own crew to fight for their freedom and get the criminals arrested?

      Just a thought.

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    6. dpg Singularity
      2018-07-17T04:04:00+10:00Added an answer on July 17, 2018 at 4:04 am

      It’s certainly a topical, very topical concept.

      But, like Nir Shelter, I’m not (yet)? sold on the the objective goal.

      And I think the suggestion of making the mafia the bad guys is too conventional, too easy, too obvious — a tired, overused? and misused trope.

      Rather, I would suggest a story line that explores the intrinsic “banality of evil” in the for-profit warehousing of the elderly.? It’s a? national scandal in the United States.? Perfectly legit and respectable corporations are gaming the system to starve the elderly of services in order to fatten their bottom line.??

      For example, a report was recently released revealing that many nursing homes have deliberately understated for years the level of staffing they have .? On weekends,? it’s practically a “ghost town” in many facilities in terms of the staff on duty;? the residents have to fend for themselves.??(Now there’s a plot point for you.)

      I think there’s one-hell-of a movie here, but I suggest digging further to reveal just the depth and breadth of the particular hell for the protagonist and her motley crew.

      Best wishes with this idea.

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    7. dpg Singularity
      2018-07-19T03:56:02+10:00Added an answer on July 19, 2018 at 3:56 am

      >>>. It?s a heist movie,

      How so?? The money’s off site in bank accounts.? Not in a nursing home .? What’s there to “heist” in a nursing home?? Adult diapers?

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    8. dpg Singularity
      2018-07-28T07:10:45+10:00Added an answer on July 28, 2018 at 7:10 am

      Yo, Nicholas Andrews? Halls!

      Truth is stranger than fiction.? Check out this news story about prison inmates who hacked an in-house credit system for $US 225,000.? You might be able to adapt it to this story.

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