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on An educated Indian homemaker in Sydney enters a local council election, hoping to reclaim the identity her ambitious daughter no longer sees, while the daughter fights for a director promotion; as both women struggle to be taken seriously, their parallel journeys slowly transform how they see each other.

Dual protagonist stories are often more powerful than those with just one. But selling them in a logline is hard. You now have two clear protagonists, two goals, but no inciting event. What kicks off the story? There is no…
on When the sole survivor of a destroyed lifeboat is pulled aboard a sinking luxury liner, he is plunged into further chaos as the crew begins to abandon the doomed passengers of the SS Arctic.

Lots to love here! A specific character, an event that forces the story, no filler or hedging. But 'Plunged into further chaos' is a feeling/situation, not an action. Nothing he wants or does is stated: no pursuit, no endpoint. Antagonist…
on When a young archivist graduates and comes home to a family remade by her sister’s undiagnosed illness, two stray cats follow her off the train and start pulling her into her neighbors’ buried griefs, waking a gift in her body that turns water into stories.

There's a great opportunity for character drama, but we need specifics. There's no goal—she doesn't pursue anything, she's 'pulled into' things and things 'wake' in her. No antagonist, just diffuse atmosphere: sister's illness, cats, neighbors' griefs, a magic gift all…